Once there was a lady who was getting married
so she put on ha dress as soft as a marshmallow then she put on her shoes but her husband rushed her so they could getting married . So she was finished then she asked if she could go toilet so she ran as fast as she could but she went to the forest because she didn't want to get married so the people was worried. Then her feet were sore so she took of her shoes then mude went in her face then she screamed "AHHHH" out loud then her husband heard her scream so he ran into the forest then saw her and said "are you alright" "now I am" then they kissed and went on there honeymoon and they had a great time.
Aw, what a fairytale ending - and they lived happily ever after!
ReplyDeleteYus! You have got a simile, you have got dialogue, you have added detail and some powerful words. Awesome!
Next steps - where are your paragraphs? (I'm sure you did this in your book! Make sure you type these in!)