Wednesday 21 September 2016
a scary spooky forest
once there was a man in the forest and his name was jack and he was there by himself and on the other side of the forest there was another man called bob and he was in the forest by himself too. Then some wolves came to eat jack up so bob heard something so he ran to the other side of the forest but it was getting darker and darker then he saw a big blue light as big as a big tree and the light was called haze so he went and he heard someone shout out "HELP" "HELP" "I'M GETTING CHASED BY SOME WOLVES" so he ran as fast as he could.So he called out "HELP" "HELP and someone in a car and his name was john but the wolves were sceard when john went there and they ran away then the three boys went home asleep.
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"HELP, HELP, I'M GETTING CHASED BY SOME WOLVES"
ReplyDeleteThis part is the first part I looked at when I came to your blog. What a great way to get your reader hooked into your story!
You just keep getting better - using dialogue and speech marks, adding detail and powerful words!
Next steps - where are your paragraphs? (I'm sure you had these in your book, remember them to type them in)